The prompt from One Deep Breath is “poetry of the sea”. I like ending National Poetry Month with the sea.
Foamy ocean waves
Lace pattern on wet sand
Crab scuttles alone.
Head on over to see more at One Deep Breath.
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The prompt from One Deep Breath is “poetry of the sea”. I like ending National Poetry Month with the sea.
Foamy ocean waves
Lace pattern on wet sand
Crab scuttles alone.
Head on over to see more at One Deep Breath.
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14 responses so far ↓
Catherine // May 1, 2007 at 5:36 am |
Oh, is the prompt up now? That’s the trouble with living in New Zealand, everything seems to happen while I’m asleep, or while I’m at work.
I love the sea, and your haiku is very evocative.
Crafty Green Poet // May 1, 2007 at 12:47 pm |
this is beautiful, you’ve captured the moment perfectly.
Regina Clare Jane // May 1, 2007 at 1:58 pm |
I love the imagery of the crab scuttling- it’s a perfect word for what they do!
Quiet Paths // May 1, 2007 at 4:15 pm |
You did evoke that perfect sand moment when the waves have washed lace into it. I can see it clearly! Great haiku.
Mandy // May 1, 2007 at 6:45 pm |
the image of the crab makes this
Unfolding Rose // May 1, 2007 at 8:15 pm |
i love the details that emerge from those foamy waves! the scene really drew me in.
Sandy // May 1, 2007 at 8:30 pm |
Jone, I love the image of lace on sand. I will have to watch for that.
Liza Lee Miller // May 1, 2007 at 8:41 pm |
Lovely images . . . foamy, lace, scuttles — really nice.
Becca // May 1, 2007 at 11:23 pm |
I like the imagery of a “lace pattern”…very nice
Patois // May 2, 2007 at 9:55 pm |
I, too, adore the evoking of lace. It is so easily seen once you have voiced it.
megan // May 4, 2007 at 1:56 pm |
scuttles is a kinetic gem
Ackworth Born // May 6, 2007 at 12:20 pm |
I like the crab too.
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