One Single Impression: Ocean

“Ocean” is the prompt from Sweetest in the Gale (formerly Fledgling Poet) at One Single Impression. 

resbeach2Seaside, Oregon 2009

I have been reading Jane Reichhold’s Writing and Enjoying Haiku this summer.  It’s been my summer book study over at “Check It Out”.  Just so happens that I revised this haiku originally posted in 2007.

foamy ocean waves
lace pattern on wet sand
crab scuttles alone

Revision 1:

ocean crochet
solitary crab scuttles
ebb tide remnant

Revision 2:

solitary crab scuttles
over foamy crochet
ebb tide remnant

To read about my revision process, visit here.  And be sure to visit others take on “ocean” at One Single Impression.

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5 Responses to One Single Impression: Ocean

  1. Marilyn says:

    Gorgeous picture and words, my favorite subject.

  2. sassysezzy says:

    It’s great to see how this has evolved!
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  3. Gemma says:

    I love how these haikus evolve! They are like weaving a project till the final design of the fabric is complete!

  4. macrush53 says:

    It is funny how switching two lines changes the tone.

  5. SandyCarlson says:

    I sure do like that first one. Thanks for joining us.

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