This week’s Poetry Stretch is writing a pantoum. I love this form. My 81-year-old aunt passed away on Monday. Her husband was my father’s best man and best childhood friend. They were aunt and uncle by the LOVE DNA. Integral part of my childhood.
My uncle passed in 1995. Last summer, my aunt broke her hip and it was a struggle until the first day of March. She’s joined her husband and my parents and I imagine the jokes are flowing.
I feel conflicted that I cannot hop a plane to New Jersey to be at her service. This is where no amount of smart phones, internet, or our modern conveniences help. But I can write and so here is a tribute to her.
Aunt Dot, Chuck and I, 2005
Aunt Dot
she was everyone’s loving aunt
lived alone by an ever-rising river
loved baseball, the Mets and jokes
could always count on her laughter
lived alone by an ever-rising river
three thousand miles didn’t matter
could always count on her laughter
when the phone rang and it was her
three thousand miles didn’t matter
anticipated summer visits
when the phone rang and it was her
announcing plans for Disneyland
anticipated summer visits
drinking cokes
announcing plans for Disneyland
eating pork chops down to the marrow
drinking cokes
a joyful voice, “What’s else, hon’, what else?”
eating pork chops down to the marrow
catching up the family natterings
a joyful voice, “What’s else, hon’, what else?”
loved baseball, the Mets and jokes
catching up the family natterings
she was everyone’s loving aunt
Thank you, Aunt Dot, thank you.
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Beautiful! I feel like I know your wonderful aunt. Thanks for sharing this.
Great poem. I loved the repetition – it creates movement and power. Wonderful.
What strikes me with this elegy is the tone that you capture. I really get a sense of who she was and your relationship. It has a Rockwellian feel in all the right ways. I also love the rhythm. It’s a lovely tribute to your aunt.
A superb tribute. You’ve used the form perfectly for this oh-so lovely piece!
This is just lovely! Such a nice and loving tribute to your aunt. Thanks for sharing.
Pamela
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I great a real sense of who this genuine woman was. Lovely tribute.
Aww, Jone… such a sweet tribute. Loved the : “lived alone by an ever-rising river” line.
Thank you for this.
In reading your words I felt wrapped in the warm embrace of a loving maternal hug…thank you
A pantoum is a great form for this sort of tribute, and you’ve used it well. The repetition echoes the way we return again and again to certain key memories of those who have passed.
Yes, a lovely tribute which benefits from the pantoum style.
Thanks for sharing this warming tribute to your dear aunt.
I like the way you’ve used repeated lines here. It strengthens the whole.