Double Dare

Zachary Schomburg’s prompt, “create a hinge”  has been with me all week. What a challenge! Not sure that I completed the prompt but it “unhinged” me a bit.

the house sat silent in our neighborhood
wrought iron fence, weedy front, a place for games
hide n’ seek, “ring the doorbell” double dares and fear

secret missions, climbing over rusty sentinel, lacking fear
a marauding group of master mischief ninjas in the neighborhood
summer, late night always the best time for games

“ring the doorbell” gave way to other games
that first kiss from a younger man, I trembled in fear
summer, late night, a double dare  in the neighborhood

 childhood neighborhood, childhood games, I confess without fear

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11 Responses to Double Dare

  1. I think you did a fine job with the prompt…your images take us from childhood to adolescence, and your language always gives an undertone of the forbidden, be it childhood games or the first kiss.

    -Nicole

  2. Tumblewords says:

    I love this – it’s so universally ‘personal’. Lovely read.

  3. This poem is like an “initiation” poem–about becoming an adult.

  4. Karen says:

    This is really nice. It brings back memories for me.

  5. Jone,
    Yes this has wonderful imagery and I also love the word play here. Thanks for sharing.
    Pamela

  6. poemblaze says:

    I agree about the master mischief ninjas line. Wonderful imagery and wordplay. Well written throughout.

  7. Lisa Nowak says:

    Oh, I absolutely love this part: “a marauding group of master mischief ninjas in the neighborhood
    summer, late night always the best time for games.” It brings such a great image to mind, and taps into my childhood memories.

  8. Jules says:

    Impressive! Chilling. And I’m with Cynthia: I like your “master mischief ninjas.”

  9. This was a really fun read. I like the menacing sense I get from the description of the house in the first part of the poem–yet in the beginning, the games are innocent and fun…then it transitions into more scary, grown-up stuff, but still with the house as the anchoring image…nicely done!

  10. It WAS a very challenging prompt..but you did a fine job with it! From the beginning of early childhood, to the end with your character changing and growing. I also got quite a kick out of the description of “master mischief ninjas!

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