Poetry Friday: Thinking of Mom

POETRY FRIDAY

Thanks to Jama at Jama’s Alphabet Soup for hosting Poetry Friday.

Today I’m featuring the poem that was written to my mom and was published in The Best of  Today’s Little Ditty, V.2.  by Michelle Heidenrich Barnes.

MomMom after she cut off her long hair and dyed it blonde.  One of my favorite photos of her.

French Twist

Mom wore her hair in a French twist.
A practical carefree style for a nurse
who put patients first and fashion last
with her family sandwiched in between.

A practical carefree style for a nurse.
She worked nights while dad worked days
with her family sandwiched in between.
She slept during the day with everyone at school.

She worked nights while dad worked days.
Mom found time for a weekly ritual–
She slept during the day with everyone at school
then drove to the beauty parlor on Main Street.

Mom found time for a weekly ritual.
A tiny treat she afforded herself,
a drive to the beauty parlor on Main Street
to get her hair washed, dried, and set.

A tiny treat she afforded herself,
she who put patients first and fashion last
to get her hair washed, dried, and set.
Mom wore her hair in a French twist.

©jone rush macculloch

This poem actually was drafted in 2007 and based on a Scribblings’ Prompt: Hair.  I was fascinated with the fact that my mother made a dramatic change in her hair when I was about ten years old.

In 2015, I revised the poem again.  And when Ken Nesbitt issues the DMC in October 2016, I decided it needed to be written as a pantoum.

I remember Mom as a hugely generous being who rarely put the attention on herself.  It’s something I strive to do each day.  She’s been gone nineteen years and I miss her still.  Her sense of humor was wicked as well springing surprises on people.  And she made killer peach jam and lemon meringue pie.

 

 

 

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12 Responses to Poetry Friday: Thinking of Mom

  1. jama says:

    Enjoyed your poem and learning more about your mom. I remember my half-sister wore a French twist for awhile and I was fascinated by it.

  2. maryleehahn says:

    Great memories.

    I love that you’ve continued to rework this poem!

  3. Tara Smith says:

    I love the way this poem painted such a vivid picture of your mother, Jone – just beautifully done.

  4. cvarsalona says:

    Jone, your Mom’s photo and backstory make me think of the love Moms share with their families and they “sandwich family in between.” The pantoum poem was beautifully designed and is such a tribute to your Mom who managed to save some time for her self-care routine, as we should all do. I will also save your poem so I can try my hand at this format that looks tricky. You captured the essence of your Mom in this tribute poem. Your bird photo is lovely and makes me think that you may have some nature photos and poems to accompany them for my Sense-sational Spring Gallery that I am gathering this month.

  5. margaretsmn says:

    You have crafted this pantoum well. I want to save it as a mentor text. I love the picture of your mom and the idea that even though she lived a selfless life, she gave herself this one luxury. I think it’s important for women to take care of themselves, especially when their jobs are so giving. As a teacher, I have given myself the luxury of a massage once a month. It helps me help others.

  6. Linda Mitchell says:

    The photo is really great. It’s fun and weird to discover the person of our parents as we grow up and learn more about life. I see a lady with some spunk in that smile. I’ll bet she was a great nurse. The intertwined repeating lines are perfect for a poem about family….because isn’t that what we are to each other? Thank you for sharing this poem this weekend. It’s perfect.

  7. lindabaie says:

    Wonderful to read this again, Jone. I loved it in the book, too, and am amazed how your mother managed those nights and all the other things mothers do. I know that you saw it as “family sandwiched in between” and love that idea. She did it, and still managed the hair do, plus the peach jam and lemon meringue pie. Mothers are miracle workers!

  8. Beautiful tribute poem to your mom Jone. This line fits so well for what you describe
    “with her family sandwiched in between.”It sounds like she was a very altruistic person and reminds me of how you reach out to your students and share their poetry–and the peach jam sounds lovely, thanks!

  9. Kay Mcgriff says:

    This is a lovely tribute to your mom!

  10. Claire says:

    What a lovely tribute to your mom! Thanks for sharing 🙂

  11. Thank you for sharing this poem that I love so much, Jone! I enjoyed hearing the backstory and seeing that beautiful photograph, too. It’s interesting how something a parent does when we’re young can make a lifelong impression, even if that something really had nothing directly to do with us!

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